30 Days of Sentence Writing - Day 28
Its aim is to integrate and streamline the vast delivery resources that already exist across China, rather than build its own.
(Which model emerges victorious) will ultimately depend on (which best controls costs), thinks Eric Lin of ubs, a bank.
[分数] [4/5]
S01
分析
Its aim is to integrate and streamline the vast delivery resources that already exist across China, rather than build its own.
菜鸟的宗旨并非自建物流公司，而是整合目前国内海量的配送资源，提高配送效率。
【结构】XX’s aim is to do sth., rather than do sth..
【解析】
[主干]
Its aim is to integrate and streamline the vast delivery resources, rather than build its own.
[修饰主干的部分]
rather than（准并列连词）build its own 与前面的不等式 to integrate and streamline the vast delivery resources 一起构成并列表语，rather than 在不跟情态动词（would, will）等连用时，仅仅表示否定，译为“而不是”。这种用法的 rather than 叫做准并列连词，在语义上相当于 and not。但是，必须注意，它往往连接词性相同的词项。
定语从句 that already exist across China，修饰前面的先行词 the vast delivery resources，关系代词 that 在定语从句中作主语。
仿写
科技话题
中文：
我们的目标是利用科技产品获得精神和物质上的自由，而不是被它们所奴役
参考译文：
Our aim is to use technological products to acquire spiritual and material freedoms, rather than become a slave to them.
我的回答：
Our aim is to achieve physical and mental freedom, rather than being enslaved.
评价：
to do … rather than do - be enslaved by them
环境话题
中文：
我们的目标是建造工厂从而创造更多的工作机会，而不是让人们因为这些工厂而承受低质的空气和水源质量。
参考译文：
Our aim is to build factories to create more job opportunities, rather than make people suffer from poor air and water quality caused by these plants.
我的回答：
Our aim is to create more jobs by building up factories, rather than make people enduring poor air and water quality for them.
评价：
make sb. do - endure …
文化传统话题
中文：
我们的目标是向先进的西方国家学习，而不是全面拒绝外国文化。
参考译文：
Our aim is to learn from advanced western countries, rather than shut the dorr on all foreign cultures.
我的回答：
Our aim is to learn from advanced western countries, rather than turn all foreign cultures away.
评价：
nice
个人品质话题
中文：
教育的目标是培养孩子的诚实和自信等品质，而不是一味让他们在考试中取得高分。
参考译文：
The aim of education is to instill in our children qualities such as confidence and honesty, rather than push them to get scores in the exam.
我的回答：
Aim of education is to develop senses of integrity and self-confidence, rather than keep them get high score in exams.
评价：
- 注意冠词 The aim
- them 指代不明，前面要加上 children: is to develop children’s qualities such as integrity and self-confidence
S02
分析
(Which model emerges victorious) will ultimately depend on (which best controls costs), thinks Eric Lin of ubs, a bank.
瑞士联合银行（UBS）的 Eric Lin 认为，哪种模式最终会胜出取决于哪种模式能最好地控制成本。
【结构】…, while …, which XX emerges victorious will ultimately depend on sth..
【解析】
[主干]
thinks Eric Lin of ubs, 这是一个倒装句型，自然语序是 Eric Lin of ubs，a bank
[修饰主干的部分]
thinks … 同位语 a bank，进一步补充说明 UBS（瑞士联合银行）的相关信息。
宾语从句 Which model emerges victorious will ultimately depend on which best controls costs, 整个句子作谓语 thinks 的宾语，为了强调宾语的内容，就把宾语从句提前。
主语从句 Which model emerges victorious（哪种模式会胜出）谓语 will ultimately depend on … （最终取决于）
宾语从句 which best controls costs，作介词 on 的宾语，这里 which best controls costs = which controls costs best（哪种模式能最好地控制成本）
仿写一个观点
科技话题
中文：
有些人担心智能手机对孩子眼镜造成伤害，但更多人鼓励孩子们利用手机来辅助学习。哪种观点最终会胜出取决于家长和老师如何帮助孩子们正确地，适度地使用智能手机。
参考译文：
Some worry about the damage smartphones can do to children’s eyes, while many more encourage their children to make good use of phones to facilitate earning, and which way emerges victorious will ultimately depend on how parents and teachers help children use smartphones properly and in moderation.
我的回答：
Which opinion that smartphones will damage children’s eyes or help them study emerges victorious will ultimately depend on how parents and teachers tell children use smartphones properly.
评价：
注意原文是两种观点：1.对眼睛造成伤害；2.辅助学习。这里漏了一个观点
环境话题
中文：
一些居民强烈反对建造可能会污染城市环境的工厂，但也有不少居民支持这个方案，因为建造工厂能带来经济上的益处，哪种观点最终会胜出完全取决于这些工厂如何处理环境问题。
参考译文：
Some residents are strongly opposed to building factories that could pollute the city’s environment, while many others support the plan based on the economic benefits it can bring,and which way emerges victorious will ultimately depend on how these factories handle environmental issues.
我的回答：
Some residents strongly aganinst to build factories might pollute the environment, whereas others are for because of the enconomincal benefits. Which opinion emerges victorious will ultimately depend on how factories deal with these environmental issues.
评价：
Some residents are strongly against building factories that might pollute the environment be for sth. - others are for it.
文化传统话题
中文：
现在有越来越多的年轻人在过外来节日，一些人对这一趋势感到担忧，但也有很多人认为这是文化交流的一部分，哪种论点最终会胜出完全取决于我们本民族的文化的丰富程度以及生命力。
参考译文：
Some people are worried about the trend that more and more young people are celebrating foreign holidays, while many others believe that this is part of cultural exchange, and which argument emerges victorious will ultimately depend on the richness and vitality of our own culture.
我的回答：
Some people are worried about more young people are celebrating foreign festivals, whereas others think it is a part of cultural communication. Which opinion emerges victorious will ultimately depend on how much abundance and vitality our own culture has.
评价：
about 是介词，后不可一个完整句子：are worried about the trend that more and more … depend on the abundance and vitality of our own culture.
个人品质话题
中文：
如今很多教育专家呼吁对孩子的教育给予一个更加轻松的方法，但也不乏一些家长坚持要让小孩学习以此来让小孩获得领先优势，哪一种方式能获胜完全取决与家长怎样定义成功。
参考译文：
Nowadays,many education experts are arguing for a relaxed approach towards children’s education,while some parents still insist on pushing their children to learn in order to give them a head start,and which method emerges victorious will depend on how parents define success.
我的回答：
Nowadays many education experts are advocating for easier methods for education of children whereas some parents persist to ask their kids learning to ahead of others. hich opinion emerges victorious will ultimately depend on how parents define success.
评价：
easier methods for children’s education persist in doing - persist in asking their kids to learn in order to be ahead of others 或者参考译文的 in order to give them a head start.