30 Days of Sentence Writing - Day 26
There is probably no better way for a foreigner to appreciate the richness and variety of the English language than by studying the various ways in which Shakespeare used it.
Silicon Valley is a magnet to which numerous talented engineers, scientists and entrepreneurs from overseas flock in search of fame and fast money.
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S01
分析
There is probably no better way for a foreigner to appreciate the richness and variety of the English language than by studying the various ways in which Shakespeare used it.
对于一名外国人而言，如果想欣赏英语语言的丰富性和多样性，最好的方式莫过于研究莎士比亚驾驭英语的各种手法。
【结构】There is probably no better way for A to do sth. than by doing …
【解析】
这是一个表存在的 there be 句型。介词短语 for a foreigner (or an English) 加上不定式结构 to appreciate the richness and variety of the English language 作 way 的后置定语；其中介词短语 of the English language 作 the richness and variety 的后置定语。
表比较的介词 than 连接一个介词短语 by studying the various ways in which Shakespeare uses it，其中包含一个动名词短语 studying the various ways in which Shakespeare uses it，该动名词短语中包含一个介词 in 加上关系代词 which 引导的限制性定语从句修饰 ways。
仿写
科技话题
中文：
对于偏远地区的学生而言，如果想要接受好的教育，最好的偶还是莫过于参加在线课程，这些课程通常是由顶级教师提供的。
参考译文：
There is no better way for student from remote areas to receive a good education than by taking online courses, which are often given by top-class teachers.
我的回答：
There is probably no better way for students who live in remote areas to receive good education than by learning online courses which are provided by top-class teachers.
评价：
句子表达清晰流畅
环境话题
中文：
对于深受空气污染侵害的市民而言，他们想要享受清新的空气，最好的方式莫过于制定有效的法律惩罚破坏环境的人。
参考译文：
There is no better way for citizens who suffer from air pollution to enjoy clean air than by enacting effective laws to punish those who damage the environment.
我的回答：
There is probably no better way for citizens who bothered by polluted air to enjoy fresh air than by legislating to punish people who damage environment.
评价：
- environment -> the environment
- who bothered -> who are bothered
文化传统话题
中文：
对于父母已经年迈的子女，如果想要孝顺他们的父母，最好的方式莫过于孩子常回家去看望父母
参考译文：
There is no better way for young people to fulfill their filial duties thatn by coming home to visit their elderly parents often.
我的回答：
There is probably no better way for children want to do their filial duty than by going home to visit their parents.
评价：
want to do -> to do
个人品质话题
中文：
对于大学生而言，如果想提升自己的竞争力，最好的方式莫过于完成有意义且有挑战性的任务。
参考译文：
There is no better way for college student to improve their competitiveness thatn by taking on tasks that are both challenging and rewarding.
我的回答：
There is probably no better way for college students to enhance their competitiveness than by doing meaningful and challenging tasks.
评价：
句子结构把握得很好
S02
分析
Silicon Valley is a magnet to which numerous talented engineers, scientists and entrepreneurs from overseas flock in search of fame and fast money.
硅谷就像是一块磁铁，让无数才华横溢的海外工程师，科学家和企业家为了名利蜂拥而至
【结构】A is a magnet + 定语从句
【解析】
[主干]
Silicon Valley is a magnet
[修饰主干的部分]
to which numerous talented engineers, scientists and entrepreneurs from overseas flock in search of fame and fast money 这整个部分是限制性定语从句，修饰 magnet，该从句主语是 numerous talented engineers, scientists and entrepreneurs, from overseas 是介词短语做后置定语修饰主语，谓语是 flock to which (这里 which 指代 magnet，在从句中做宾语)，in search of fame and fast money 做目的状语。
仿写
科技话题
中文：
虚拟世界就像是一块磁铁，让无数年轻人为了满足娱乐、学习和交流的需求蜂拥而至。
参考译文：
The virtual world is a magnet to which countless young people flock to satisfy their needs for entertainment, learning and communication.
我的回答：
Virtual world is a magnet to which numerous young peoples who need to fufill their needs in entertainment, learning and communication flock in.
评价：
- flock in -> flock; flock 已经与 which 前面的 to 构成搭配
- Virtual world -> The virtual world
环境话题
中文：
巨额的经济利益就像是一块磁铁，让渴望一夜暴富的人蜂拥而至，即使以牺牲濒危物种的生命为代价。
参考译文：
Huge financial benefits are a magnet to which people desiring overnight riches flock even at the expense of the lives of endangered species.
我的回答：
Vast profits is a magnet to which people who want to make a quick buck in cost of sacrifice endangered spicies flock in.
评价：
- sacrifice endangered spicies -> the lives of endangered species.
- in cost of -> at the cost of;
- profits is -> profits are
- flock in -> flock; flock 已经与 which 前面的 to 构成搭配
文化传统话题
中文：
新奇的外国文化就像一块磁铁，让对外部世界感兴趣的年轻人蜂拥而至。
参考译文：
Novel foreign cultures are a magnet to which young people who are curious about the outside world flock.
我的回答：
Novel foreign culture is a magnet to young people who are interested in world outside flock in.
评价：
flock in -> flock; flock 已经与 which 前面的 to 构成搭配
个人品质话题
中文：
名牌大学就像一块磁铁，让无数聪明且勤奋的学生为了知识和职业前景蜂拥而至。
参考译文：
Prestigious universities are a magnet to which countless bright and hardworking students flock in search of knowledge and career prospects.
我的回答：
Prestigious universities is a magnet to which numerous young peoples flock in for knowleged and career prospects.
评价：
- flock in -> flock; flock 已经与 which 前面的 to 构成搭配
- knowleged -> knowledge;
- Prestigious universities is -> Prestigious universities are; 注意主谓一致