30 Days of Sentence Writing - Day 23
Sensible ideas have been around for a long time, but the state-level bodies that govern the profession have been too conservative to implement them.
For a small group of students, professional training might be the way to go since well-developed skills, all other factors being equal, can be the difference between having a job and not.
[分数] [5/5]
S01
分析
Sensible ideas have been around for a long time, but the state-level bodies that govern the profession have been too conservative to implement them.
很早就有人提出了一些合理的意见，但是该行业的国家级管理部门过于保守，未敢实施。
【结构】Sensible ideas have been around for a long time, but A that … have been too conservative to implement them.
【解析】
[主干]
Sensible ideas have been around for a long time, but the state-level bodies … have been too conservative to implement them. 整个句子由前后两个分句构成，中间用逗号隔开，由表示转折的连词 but 连接。前一个分句的主语是 sensible ideas，谓语是 have been，表语是 around，介词短语 for a long time 作时间状语。后一个分句的主语是 the state-level bodies that govern the profession，其中由关系代词 that 引导一个限制性定语从句修饰 bodies，谓语是 have been，表语是 too conservative，其后的不定式结构 to implement them 作结果状语。
仿写
科技话题
中文：
很早就有人关于青少年沉迷手机游戏提出了一些合理的意见，但很多互联网公司因为太过贪婪而没有实施，因为实施后会减少它们的利润
参考译文：
Sensible ideas about teenagers’ addiction to mobile games have been around for a long time, but many internet companies are too greedy to implement them, because doing so will reduce their revenue.
我的回答：
Sensible ideas about anti-addiction for teenagers of mobile games have been around for a long time, but many Internet companies have been too greedy to implement them, as the implementation will cut the profits of them.
评价：
句式结构把握不错
环境话题
中文：
很早就有人关于保护野生动物提出了一些合理的意见，但政府部门实施这些建议的速度过于缓慢。
参考译文：
Sensible ideas on the protection of wild animals have been around for a long time, but government departments have been too slow to implement them.
我的回答：
Sensible ideas about wildlife protection have been around for a long time, but government departments are acting slow in the implementation.
评价：
时态把握不错
文化传统话题
中文：
很早就有人关于保护中国传统服饰提出了一些合理的意见，但政府官员过于傲慢，未考虑实施。
参考译文：
Sensible ideas on the protection of traditional Chinese clothing have been around for a long time, but government officials are too arrogant to consider implementing them.
我的回答：
Sensible ideas about traditional Chinese attire protection have been around for a long time, but officials that working in governments have been too arrogant to implement them.
评价：
too … to … 结构用的不错，点赞
个人品质话题
中文：
很早就有人关于给中小学生学业减负提出了一些合理的意见，但教育部门因为过于举棋不定而没有实施它们。
参考译文：
Sensible ideas on reducing the academic burden of primary and middle students have been around for a long time, but the education department is too endecisive to implement them.
我的回答：
Sensible ideas about unburdening schoolchildren have been around for a long time, but education departments have been too hesitating to implement them.
评价：
清楚明了
S02
分析
For a small group of students, professional training might be the way to go since well-developed skills, all other factors being equal, can be the difference between having a job and not.
对一小部分学生来讲，职业培训或许是最好的办法，因为在所有其他因素均等的情况下，完善的技能或许是能否找到工作的关键。
【结构】For A, B might be the way to go since …
【解析】
[主干]
For a small group of students, professional training might be the way to go since …
[修饰主干的部分]
主语是 professional training，谓语是 might be，表语是 the way，不定式结构 to go 作 the way 的后置定语，句首的介词短语 for a small group of students 作状语。
连词 since 引导一个原因状语从句，其中主语是 well-developed skills，谓语是 can be，表语是 the difference between having a job and not，其中介词短语 between having a job and not 作 the difference 的后置定语。all others factors being equal 是独立主格结构作插入语，其逻辑主语是 all other factors。
仿写
科技话题
中文：
对于老年人，网购或许是好的办法，因为他们行动不便。
参考译文：
For elderly people, online shopping may be the way to go since they have limited mobility.
我的回答：
For the elderly, shopping online might be the way to go since they lack of mobility.
评价：
lack(n.) of -> lack(v.) / are lacking(adj.) in
环境话题
中文：
对于保护野生动物，划定野生动物的栖息地作为保护区或许是好的办法，因为在那里的动物不会被人类打扰。
参考译文：
For the protection of wild animals, designationg wildlife habitats as conservation areas may be the way to go since animals there will not be disturbed by humans.
我的回答：
For wildlife protection, designating protected areas as wildlife habitats might be they way to go since animals live there wouldn’t be bothered by human.
评价：
- live, wouldn’t 动词重复，这里可写为 animals [living there 作后置定语] wouldn’t be bothered by human.
- might be they way -> might be the way
文化传统话题
中文：
对于弘扬中国优秀的文化传统，制作年轻人喜爱的节目或许是好的办法，因为这样能帮助传统文化生存壮大。
参考译文：
For the promotion of China’s cultural traditions, producing programs that young people adore may be the way to go since this can help traditional culture survive and thrive.
我的回答：
For promoting excellent traditional Chinese cultures, producing programmes the young fancy might be the way to help them survive and thrive.
评价：
思路清晰语义完整
个人品质话题
中文：
对于被父母溺爱的孩子，寄宿学校或许是好的办法，因为那里他们必需依靠自己，独立解决问题。
参考译文：
For children who are spoild by their parents, boarding schools may be the way to go since they will have to rely on themselves and solve problems independently.
我的回答：
For children spoiled by their parents, boarding school might be the way for them, as they have no one to rely on but themselves and settle problems independently.
评价：
简洁明了