30 Days of Sentence Writing - Day 16
Some of the senses that we and other terrestrial mammals take for granted are either reduced or absent in cetaceans or fail to function well in water.
Although population, industrial output and economic productivity have continued to soar in developed nations, the rate at which people withdraw water from aquifers, rivers and lakes has slowed.
[分数] [4/5]
S01
分析
Some of the senses that we and other terrestrial mammals take for granted are either reduced or absent in cetaceans or fail to function well in water.
我们和其他陆地哺乳动物与生俱来的一些感官在鲸目动物身上要么已经退化或消失，要么在水中无法正常发挥机能。
【结构】A that sb. take for grant are …
【解析】
[主干]
Some of the senses are either reduced or absent in cetaceans or fail to function well in water.
[修饰主干的部分]
定语从句：that we and other terrestrial mammals take for granted 这是一个定语从句，修饰 senses，其中 that 指代 senses 在从句中充当动词 take 的宾语。这种情况下，that 可省略。如果在从句中充当主语则不可省略，比如：I bought a book that helped me a lot.
仿写
科技话题
中文：
年轻人已经认为理所当然的网购对很多老年人而言是比较陌生的。
参考译文：
Online shopping that young people have taken for granted is relatively unfamiliar to many elderly people.
我的回答：
Online shopping that the young take for granted are unfamiliar to many elderly people.
评价：
环境话题
中文：
城市居民已经认为理所当然的糟糕空气质量对在生活在农村的人看来是不可忍受的。
参考译文：
The poor air quality that city dwellers have taken for granted is unbearable for those living in the countryside.
我的回答：
Poor air quality that citizens take for granted are intolenrable to people who lived in rural area.
评价：
文化传统话题
中文：
很多大城市的孩子认为理所当然的外国电影和音乐在他们农村的同龄人看来是不熟悉的，而且这一认识上的差距没有缩小的迹象。
参考译文：
The foreign movies and music that many children in big cities have taken for granted are relatively new for their peers in rural areas, and thi understanding gap has no sign of narrowing.
我的回答：
Foreign movies and music that children lived in cities take for granted are unfamiliar to their counterparts, and this disparity on cognition has no signs of diminishing.
评价：
个人品质话题
中文：
很多父母认为理所当然的保护孩子的措施对孩子的身心健康弊大于利。
参考译文：
The practices that many parents take for granted to protect their children can do more harm than good to the children’s physical and mental wellbeing.
我的回答：
Protection measurements that parents take for granted do more harm than good for children’s mental and physical health.
评价：
S02
分析
Although population, industrial output and economic productivity have continued to soar in developed nations, the rate at which people withdraw water from aquifers, rivers and lakes has slowed.
虽然人口，工业产量和经济生产率在发达国家在持续迅猛增长，人们从地下蓄水层和河湖中抽取水资源的速度却已经在减缓。
【结构】although … , the rate at which has slowed/increased
【解析】
[主干]
the rate has slowed
[修饰主干的部分]
让步状语从句：Although population, industrial output and economic productivity have continued to soar in developed nations 这是连词 although 引导的让步状语从句，其中 population, industrial output and economic productivity 这三个是并列的主语，in developed nations 是介宾结构做地点状语。
定语从句：at which people withdraw water from aquifers, rivers and lakes 这是一个定语从句，前面有一个 at 不符合中文语言习惯。which 在从句中，指代 the rare，所以从句补充完整是这样的：people withdraw water from aquifers at which(the rate)，at which 是一个整体做从句的状语，所以当 which 提前时，at 也一并提前以保持状语成分的完整性。
仿写
科技话题
中文：
尽管 GDP 和大学毕业生数量在这个国家里面正在持续迅猛增长，人们流入大城市里定居的速率已经在减缓。
参考译文：
Although GDP and the number of college graduates continue to soar in this country, the rate at which people move to big cities has slowed.
我的回答：
Although GDP and number of graduates have continued to soar in this country, the rate at which people settling in metropolis has slowed.
评价：
环境话题
中文：
尽管工厂数量在该地区持续增长，人们排放污染环境的工业废品的势头已经在减缓。
参考译文：
Although the number of factories continues to soar in this area, the rate at which people discharge industrial waste that pollute the environment has slowed.
我的回答：
Although the number of factory have soared in this area, the rate at which trend of people discharge polluted industrial waste has slowed.
评价：
文化传统话题
中文：
尽管基础设施工程在很多城市持续迅猛增长，政府下令拆毁值得保护的古代建筑的势头已经在大大减缓。
参考译文：
Although the number of construction projects continues to soar in this city, the rate at which the government orders the demolition of ancient buildings worth preserving has slowed.
我的回答：
Although the number of infrastructural project have continued to soar in many cities, the rate at which trend of government require demolishing ancient architectures has slowed.
评价：
个人品质话题
中文：
尽管出国留学的年轻人数量持续增长，学生完成学业后回国的趋势也已经在上升。
参考译文：
Although the number of young people studying abroad continues to soar, the rate at which students return to their home country after completing their studies has also increased.
我的回答：
Although the number of young people studying abroad have continued to soar, the rate at which students come back to work after completing their education has increased.
评价：