30 Days of Sentence Writing - Day 12
(Today,) (as the economy emerges from the pandemic,) a reversal [of the primacy of capital (over labour)] beckons — and it will come sooner (than you think).
It might seem premature to predict a wonderful world of work only a year on from a labour-market catastrophe.
[分数] [4/5]
S01
分析
(Today,) (as the economy emerges from the pandemic,) a reversal [of the primacy of capital (over labour)] beckons — and it will come sooner (than you think).
今天，随着经济从疫情中复苏，资本凌驾于劳动力之上的局面正在发生逆转——而且它会比你想象的来得更快。
【结构】as 引导伴随状语 + a reversal of sth. beckons — and …
【解析】
[主干]
a reversal beckons — and it will come sooner.
这里 sooner 是副词 soon 的比较级。
[修饰主干的部分]
时间状语：today 这个词在不同语境中可以是副词，比如本文的用法，意思是“当今的”。也可以是名词，比如：Today is even hotter than yesterday! 今天甚至比昨天还热！
伴随状语从句：as the economy emerges from the pandemic 是连词 as 引导的伴随状语从句后置定语：of the primacy of capital over labour整体是介词 of 和名词 primacy 结构的后置定语，修饰 reversal。其后 of capital 同理，修饰 primacy，而 over labour 是介词结构引导的地点状语。
比较状语从句：than you think 中，than 是连词，引导比较状语从句。than 也可以是个介词，比如：My son is a lot taller than my daughter. 我的儿子比女儿高得多。
重点词汇：beckon 在这里是不可数名词，它的用法是：If an event or achievement beckons, it is likely to happen 有可能发生；召唤。【例如】She's an excellent student, for whom a wonderful future beckons. 她是个优秀的学生，美妙的前程在召唤她。
仿写
科技话题
中文：
随着科技快速进步，人类受困于能源短缺的局面正在发生逆转，并且这样的变化是几乎不可逆的。
参考译文：
As technology advances by leaps and bounds, a reversal of human beings troubled by energy scarcity beckons —— and it is almost irreversible.
我的回答：
As the rapid development of technology, a reversal of human trapping in the shortage of energy beckons — and it is irreversible.
评价：
- human trapping -> humans trapped; 过去分词作后置定语
- As - with; as 是连词，所以用 as 时后面必须是从句
环境话题
中文：
随着政府持续地治理环境污染，市民被污染的水和空气影响的局面正在发生逆转，并且这样的变化也会在其他城市发生。
参考译文：
As the government continues to reduce environmental pollution, a reversal of citizens being affected by polluted water and air beckons —— and it will also occur in other cities.
我的回答：
As the continuously governening of environmental pollution by the government, a reversal of citizen affected by polluted air and water beckons — and it will happen in other cities.
评价：
- citizen -> citizens;
- governening -> governance;
文化传统话题
中文：
随着父母变得年迈，它们对成年子女提供支持的模式正在发生逆转，并且这样的逆转是不可改变的。
参考译文：
As parents grow older, a reversal of them supporting their adult children beckons —— and it is irreversible.
我的回答：
As parents growing old, a reversal of a pattern they supporting grown-up children beckons — and this process cannot be changed.
评价：
As parents growing old, -> As parents grow old; as 连词
个人品质话题
中文：
随着越来越多的 80 后和 90 后成为家长，孩子们被一味要求考高分的局面正在发生逆转，并且它的到来会比我们想象地要快。
参考译文：
As more and more millennials become parents, a reversal of children being required to put scores above anything else beckons —— and it will come sooner than we thought.
我的回答：
As more and more millennial grown up into parents, a reversal of children be asked to get high score in exams beckons — and it will come soon fast more than we think.
评价：
- come soon fast more -> come sonner;
- score -> scores;
- be asked -> being asked
- grown -> grow; 现在时态即可
- millennial -> millennials
S02
分析
It might seem premature to predict a wonderful world of work only a year on from a labour-market catastrophe.
在劳动力市场的灾难刚过去一年的时候就预言会有一个美妙的工作世界似乎还为时过早。
【结构】It might seem premature to do sth. + 状语.
【解析】
premature 表示 happening or made too soon 草率的；仓促的；premature to do 意思就是做 … 还为时过早。
only a year on from a labour-market catastrophe 这个结构里，on 的用法比较特殊，它的意思是“之后，以后”(later than or after a particular time) 比如：
(1) Now, forty years on, this is one of the most successful theatres in the country. 四十年以后的今天，这家剧院成了国内最为成功的剧院之一。
(2) From that moment on I never believed a word she said. 从那一刻起，我不再相信她说的任何一句话。
仿写
科技话题
中文：
在世界还笼罩在核战争阴影里的时候，就说科技给人类带来巨大幸福似乎还为时过早。
参考译文：
It might seem premature to say that technology has brought great happiness to manking when the world is still under the threat of nuclear wars.
我的回答：
It might seem premature to think technologies bring huge happiness to human when the world is shrouded in gloom of the nuclear war.
评价：
- in gloom -> in the gloom
- human -> humans
- technologies bring -> technology brings; 总称科技，建议当作不可数名词
环境话题
中文：
当人们因为空气质量太差而上街不得不戴着口罩的时候，就说我们的环境政策卓有成效似乎还为时过早。
参考译文：
It might seem premature to say that our environmental policies are effective when people have to wear masks on the street because of poor air quality.
我的回答：
It might seem premature to think our environmental policy is highly effective when people have to wear masks when they go out because of too bad air quality.
评价：
思路清晰句子流畅
文化传统话题
中文：
当越来越多古代建筑因为城市发展而被拆除的时候，就说中国的传统文化得到很好的保护似乎为时过早。
参考译文：
It seems premature to say that China’s traditional culture is well preserved when more and more ancient buildings are demolished to give way to urban development.
我的回答：
It might seem premature to say that Chinese traditional culture has been well protected when increasing numbers of ancient architecture have been demolished for city developments.
评价：
- have been -> has been
- numbers -> amount; architecture 不可数名词
个人品质话题
中文：
当我们的孩子一遇到困难就放弃的时候，就说它们拥有坚忍不拔的品质似乎为时过早。
参考译文：
It seems premature to say that our children have the quality of perseverance when they easily give up in the face of difficulties.
我的回答：
It might seem premature to say that children have quality of determination when they flinch when encountering setbacks.
评价：
quality -> the quality