30 Days of Sentence Writing - Day 07

Posted on 2021-06-15 Edited on 2021-07-20 In English Views:

(Without good systems), great technology will often provide only mediocre results, (as it has in many covid-19 test-and-trace programmes).

Still, short-term supply niggles are a better problem to have than falling demand.

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S01

分析

(Without good systems), great technology will often provide only mediocre results, (as it has in many covid-19 test-and-trace programmes).

如果没有良好的系统，伟大的技术往往只能提供平庸的结果，正如在许多 covid-19 测试和追踪项目中发生的那样。

【结构】without sth. + 主干 + as 比较状语从句

【解析】

[主干]

Great technology will often provide only mediocre results.

伟大的技术往往只能提供平庸的结果

[修饰主干的部分]

状语:without good systems 为介词+名词做伴随状语。

比较状语从句:as it has in many covid-19 test-and-trace programmes 中，as it has 是 as 引导的比较状语从句，相当于as it has (done) in many covid-19…

其后 in many covid-19 test-and-trace programmes 做该从句的地点状语。

仿写

科技话题

中文：

如果没有法律法规，科技发展对人们的生活不一定会有正面的作用，正如很多带给网民伤害的网络诈骗所展示的那样。
参考译文：

Without laws and regulations, the development of science and technology may not have a positive effect on people’s lives, as many online frauds that bring harm to netizens have shown.
我的回答：

Witho out legislations, technological developments may not have positive affects to the people, as the hurts to netizens by cyber scams shown.
评价：
- shown 是不是少了个 have
- have positive affects to 介词用 on

环境话题

中文：

如果公众没有提升环保意识，我们的环境将进一步恶化，正如很多地方恶化的空气和水源质量所显示的一样。
参考译文：

Without improving the public’s environmental awareness, our environment will further deteriorate, as the worsening air and water quality in many places has attested.
我的回答：

Without developing environmental protecting awareness for the public, our environment will deteriorate, as it has in many places’ deteriorating air and water quality.
评价：

it has 是不是少了个 shown.

文化传统话题

中文：

如果放弃保留我们优秀的传统文化，我们民族的发展会受到严重的限制，正如年轻人因为崇拜外来文化而失去了民族认同感所展示的那样。
参考译文：

Without preserving our excellent traditional culture, the development of our nation will be severely restricted, as young people who admire foreign cultures and lose their national identity have shown.
我的回答：

Without retaining our good traditional culture, advancements of our culture will be restrained severly, as it has in many young people losing their cultural identities because of admiring foreign cultures.
评价：

it has 错误同上

个人品质话题

中文：

如果不培养坚持不懈的品质，再有天赋的人也将一事无成，正如很多古时候很多神童那样。
参考译文：

Without cultivating the quality of perseverance, no matter how talented people are, they will accomplish nothing, as many prodigies in history did.
我的回答：

Without quality of determination, a notmatter now gifted man will accomplish nothing, as it has in many previous prodigies.
评价：

nomatter 没见这样当形容词用的用法，这部分你看看参考译文

S02

Still, short-term supply niggles are a better problem to have than falling demand. 尽管如此，和需求下降相比，有短期供应不足这个问题倒问题不大（短期供应不足更容易被解决）。 [结构：still, A is a better problem to have than B.]【解析】这个句子是一个简单的比较句，只是中间插入了一些另外的成分，to have 是作 problem 的补语。我们平时在写这种比较句的时候也可以采用这种形式，把成分分开，丰富句子结构。

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