30 Days of Sentence Writing - Day 01
The rna vaccines are testament to the insight of Eddie Cantor, (a comedian,) (that it takes 20 years to become an overnight success).
Observing sars-cov-2 (as it mutates) is essential (if the world is to understand and defend itself against dangerous variants).
[分数] [4/5]
S01
分析
The rna vaccines are testament to the insight of Eddie Cantor, (a comedian,) (that it takes 20 years to become an overnight success).
这些 RNA 疫苗验证了喜剧演员埃迪·康托尔(Eddie Cantor)的观点: 一夜成名的背后是 20 年的默默耕耘。
【结构】A is a testament to B + 同位语从句
【解析】
[主干]
The rna vaccines are testament to the insight of Eddie Cantor.
这些 RNA 疫苗验证了埃迪·康托尔 (Eddie Cantor)的观点。
A a testament to B 的意思是“B 是 A 的证明”。testament 做一个个证据时，是可数名 词，如果只是一种证明的现象，就行本文原文这样，是不可数。
[修饰主干的部分]
同位语: a comedian 为同位语，对 Eddie Cantor 起解释说明。
同位语从句: that it takes 20 years to become an overnight success 是 insight 的同位语从句。该从句中，it 为形式主语，不定式 to become an overnight success 为真正的主语。
仿写
科技话题
中文：
这个令人忧心的场景验证了这样一句话：技术是一把双刃剑。
参考译文：
This worrying scene is a testament to the saying that technology is a two edged weapon.
我的回答：
the worrying scene is a testament to a saying, that technology cuts both ways.
评价：
- “这样”就是特指，用定冠词 the
- cuts both ways 不同凡响
学习：
双刃剑：double/two-edged blade/sword; cut both ways; both good and bad; work for or against;
环境话题
中文：
日益恶化的环境验证了被提及无数遍的观点：人类的欲望是没有止境的。
参考译文：
The deteriorating environment is a testament to the view mentioned countless times that human desires cannot be satisfied.
我的回答：
The increasingly deteriorating environment is a testament to a well-know opinion, that there are no limits to the human desire.
评价：
deteriorating 已包含 increasingly 的意思了；well-know 改为 well-known
学习：
deteriorate：to become worse; deteriorate into sth. <-> to develop into a bad or worse situation; [THE] get worse, decline, degenerate, escalate.
文化传统话题
中文：
这幅生动的漫画验证了社会学家们的研究：只有保护好本民族的文化，才能够吸收其他民族优秀的文化元素。
参考译文：
This vivid cartoon is a testament to the findings of sociologists that only by protecting our culture can we absorb the excellent cultural elements of other nations.
我的回答：
This expressive comic is a testament to the study of sociologists, that preserving one’s own national culture is then prerequisite of absorbing other cultures’ elements.
评价：
is the prerequisite of 很赞！；“优秀的” 去哪了
学习：
只有 … 才能 …：only … can …; the only way to;
个人品质话题
中文：
这两个人不同的表现验证了这样一个观点：要想让自己有所成长，必须从小树立合作意识。
参考译文：
The different performances of these two individuals are a testament to the idea that to help yourself grow you must establish a sense of cooperation from an early age.
我的回答：
The different behaviour of these two people is a testament to the view that if you want to grow up, you need to develop a sense of teamwork since childhood.
评价：
develop a sense of teamwork 此处表达不错！
学习：
树立 … 意识：develop/cultivate/build a sense of …; summon a spirit of …; … consciousness.
S02
分析
Observing sars-cov-2 (as it mutates) is essential (if the world is to understand and defend itself against dangerous variants).
如果世界想要了解并保护自己以对抗危险的变异病毒，那观察 Sars-cov-2 的变异就至关重要了。
【结构】doing A as B is essential if C is to do sth.
【解析】
[主干]
Observing sars-cov-2 is essential.
观察 Sars-cov-2 是至关重要的。
[修饰主干的部分]
时间状语: as it mutates，as 做连词引导时间状语从句。这句话的意思是“当它变异的时候”。
让步状语: if the world is to understand and defend itself against dangerous variants 是 if 引导的让步状语从句。
不定式做表语: 这里 the world is to understand and defend 是不定式做表语，表示“想要”或者“将来”的意思。
仿写
科技话题
中文：
随着科技不断发展，不断学习和拥抱新的科技成果是至关重要的，如果我们想要跟上时代的步伐。
参考译文：
Embracing new scientific and technological achievements as they advance is essential if we are to move with the times.
我的回答：
Learning new technological achievements as it develops rapidly is essential if we want to keep up in the era.
评价：
keep up in the era 的 in 改为 with 好些
学习：
跟上时代的步伐：[keep up / get / keep abreast / catch up] with the times/era
环境话题
中文：
随着人类活动日益频繁，制定严格的法律来制止各种污染环境的行为是至关重要的，如果我们想要保护自己以免受到即将来临的灾难。
参考译文：
Introducing stringent laws to curb various environmental pollution practices as they increase rapidly is essential if we are to protect ourselves from imminent disasters.
我的回答：
Establising stringent laws as the human activities are growing if we want ti keep ourselves from upcoming disasters.
评价：
Establish 是建立，放在这里不妥
学习：
制定法律：enact, legislate, make laws, introduce laws
文化传统话题
中文：
随着父母的老去，给予他们在物质上和精神上更多的关心是至关重要的，如果我们想要更好地尽孝的话。
参考译文：
Giving parents more material and mental care as they get older is essential if we are to better fulfill our filial duty.
我的回答：
Giving more cares in material and psychological to our parents as they are growing old is essential if we want to be more responsible to them.
评价：
care 作关心时不可数
学习：
- 物质和精神：material and mental
- 孝：filial(子女对父母的) affection/duty/respect
个人品质话题
中文：
随着工作和生活环境变得复杂，学会选择是至关重要的，如果我们想要实现自己的人生价值。
参考译文：
Learning to choose as the work and life environment becomes more complex is essential if we are to realize our life value.
我的回答：
Learning making choice is essential as working and living environment is becoming complicated if we want to achieve ourselves’ value.
评价：
Learn to do sth, 所以 Learning to make choice…; working and living environment 前要加冠词
学习：
工作和生活环境：the [work and life / working and living] environment